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This is a small concrete poem that I had some fun writing. It is about my home and takes the physical shape of a house. It describes home as being a simple place for one to thrive. The window on the house symbolizes a connection to the rest of the world - it always exists, and once it is closed, a person will be unable to "see the rest of the world" and become secluded. I deliberately left a big space in the word window as a play on it - it is opened in the same manner as a window is opened in real life. There are few poetic devices but I think that the image and words themselves can convey meaning.
Edit: Ignore the text bar on the second line, I had to take a screenshot of my completed poem because blogspot does not allow irregular text alignment.
Oh wow! This must have taken you forever to design but it was definitely worth it! Very clever and well designed, I especially like the line "A small window from which I can see the rest of the world", very mysterious and intriguing. Great job!
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That is pretty cool. I love how creative concrete poems can be. The theme of simplicity is a great one to endorse.
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I love how you described your thinking behind this poem! When I first read it, I thought the window was just to make it seem like a house, but now I understand that there is more meaning behind it. I like how you included a chimney and how you broke up the word window, with a window!
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Wow, very cool poem!!! Really original! I think having some punctuation (Commas) could have helped, but I really like the theme of the window being our way of connecting to the outside world when we are inside our homes. Great job!!!
ReplyDeleteWow when I first read this I didn't realize it was written by you because I thought it would have taken forever to get the words right and aligned to make this picture, awesome job! I really like this poem and the message you are trying to get across, as well as the intentional space in window which I thought was very clever.
ReplyDeleteThis is really impressive as you had to make it work with the shape of a house as well as working as an actual poem. I like how the word "window" was split up by the actual window. I agree with Rico, maybe some commas or periods could help because it seems to sort of run on.
ReplyDeleteThis is really really good and I love how it's in the shape of a house. I like the simplicity of the poem, but at the same time really speaks to the reader. I think it is very relatable as most of us feel this way about our homes. The lack of punctuation adds to the poem for me, and I disagree with Alex and Rico. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis is a really creative poem that is easy on the eyes, and fun to read. It must have taken you forever to actually get it into the shape of a house! I think that this was a goo topic to write the poem on, because everyone can relate to it in some way. Like Ada, I like the lack of punctuation. It gives the poem a unique feel about it. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Natalie... this must have taken forever. The idea of the window being "open" was genius. I also liked how you had the chimney thing made up of two of the same words ("is")
ReplyDeleteSomething cool I noticed (which you probably didn't even mean to do) was that if you read all the words on the right side of the house consecutively, starting with "basic," it reads "basic needs small from the world." And that's practically half of the message of your poem. So... I don't know, I thought that was really cool. haha
Great job!